Feedbacks // Nov. 2nd
On the 3rd period of Monday, my group got the feedbacks for our essays. Overall, there were a lot of parts we did not notice when writing and checking the essays, including personal pronouns, citations and the reliability of the source we used. Thus, when Mr. Paterson pointed out and explained these problems in detail, we were able to come up with a solution for the mistakes that we made as an individual, and as a team. Firstly, Mr. Paterson pointed out a mistake I made in my essay which was, using casual words. Specifically, I had used the phrase “loads and loads of” in my paragraph when in reality, I had to write using only formal words. To avoid these mistakes, I thought that it is important to reread the paragraph a lot of times. (Definitely more times than you think you need to!) When rereading it, it is obviously important you read it on your own, but asking your group members, and not just one but everyone, is important too. By doing so, your essay will be looked at...